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    Square root of 8

    She spoke to me about growing up broke,I asked her the square root of 8
    She spoke to me about being abused and used, she didn't know the square root of 8

    She broke down many a time,recalling times when her foot bled from needle pens
    I used first aid to bandage her up thinking she was cured, forget the square root of 8

    She took me one day to visit her dad who was living with his girlfriend in a council flat
    We left after being approached by locals who didn't know the square root of 8 either

    Her house kept getting broken into,there was a new widescreen every time I visited
    She was eating less and smoking more,lose-lose, I told her the square root of 8

    A mother at 15, she had her own orchard where she alloted her time and dedication
    Always with a spade and watering can while I snoozed to the square root of 8

    I haven't hear from her in years , I've been on too many different networks since
    Maybe she works in an office now ,maybe she's dead,I'm still writing down the square root of 8
    "If the sea were ink for [writing] the words of my Lord, the sea would be exhausted before the words of my Lord were exhausted, even if We brought the like of it as a supplement."

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    Re: Square root of 8

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    Asalamu Alaykum Warahmatullah.
    My dear brother this is touching, one of your best.

    I just wished you didn't make so many simple grammar mistakes which might have a connection to sqrt(8). Why sqrt(8) by the way?

    BarakAllahu Feek, I liked it.

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    Re: Square root of 8

    Really good poetry
    I don't know if its your writing style or what specifically it is I can't pinpoint
    But all of your poems genuinely seem so deep and like they're written from inside..
    And with Him are the keys of the Ghayb (all that is hidden), none knows them but He. And He knows whatever there is in the land and in the sea; not a leaf falls, but He knows it. There is not a grain in the darkness of the earth nor anything fresh or dry, but is written in a Clear Record”
    [al-An’aam 6:59]

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    Re: Square root of 8

    See for me
    Lifes always been a challenge
    Tryna manage
    The ups and downs
    But when i hear the sounds
    Of these words
    Brings me back
    to the ground
    Music was something to my ears
    But the Quran i witnessed men shedding tears
    Not fear
    Just ears
    Listening closely
    Till both eyes closed
    See an example in the man that was last chose
    And we suppose to be like that
    We suppose to eat like that
    We suppose to share money like that
    Show love like that
    And represent islam like that
    I seen teens on drugs and that
    Switching scenes to chase dreams like that
    Only to runaway from the deen like that
    It seems people dont understand
    Theres no other plan
    U never know when its your time
    Never know when u see the angels shine
    Or see pits of fire
    So that kind of game retire
    Coz in the change of weather
    Youl be going from suade n leather
    To being ended like heath ledger

    Any constructive criticism

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    Re: Square root of 8

    wow masha allah thats actually really good brother ^
    Imo simplicity of language always makes for way better poetry because it feels way more real/genuine
    And with Him are the keys of the Ghayb (all that is hidden), none knows them but He. And He knows whatever there is in the land and in the sea; not a leaf falls, but He knows it. There is not a grain in the darkness of the earth nor anything fresh or dry, but is written in a Clear Record”
    [al-An’aam 6:59]

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    Re: Square root of 8

    Jazak Allah khairun
    Thought id see what people on ummah think after seeing the brothers poem

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    Re: Square root of 8

    Quote Originally Posted by Abu julaybeeb View Post
    Jazak Allah khairun
    Thought id see what people on ummah think after seeing the brothers poem
    ?
    LAA ILAAHA ILLALLAH
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    Re: Square root of 8

    Who is 'she'? This poem is touching but I dunno what it's about.. it is sad tho

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    Re: Square root of 8

    this is so sad and beautiful at the same time

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    Re: Square root of 8

    Quote Originally Posted by Fakhri View Post
    ?
    I dont get why ? Lol
    I saw the brothers poem so i thought why not do one my self and see peoples opinions

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    Square root of 8

    I'm going to guess

    I think it's 64

    I know I'm wrong but idc anymore
    إقراء القران فإنه يأتي يوم القيامة شفيعا لأصحابه

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    Square root of 8

    Oh... my bad
    إقراء القران فإنه يأتي يوم القيامة شفيعا لأصحابه

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    Re: Square root of 8

    Quote Originally Posted by Abu julaybeeb View Post
    See for me
    Lifes always been a challenge
    Tryna manage
    The ups and downs
    But when i hear the sounds
    Of these words
    Brings me back
    to the ground
    Music was something to my ears
    But the Quran i witnessed men shedding tears
    Not fear
    Just ears
    Listening closely
    Till both eyes closed
    See an example in the man that was last chose
    And we suppose to be like that
    We suppose to eat like that
    We suppose to share money like that
    Show love like that
    And represent islam like that
    I seen teens on drugs and that
    Switching scenes to chase dreams like that
    Only to runaway from the deen like that
    It seems people dont understand
    Theres no other plan
    U never know when its your time
    Never know when u see the angels shine
    Or see pits of fire
    So that kind of game retire
    Coz in the change of weather
    Youl be going from suade n leather
    To being ended like heath ledger

    Any constructive criticism
    You spit fire bro


    I hear what you're saying about the youth
    It doesn't take a sleuth to work out where we headed
    Community workers,social services , I seen the good they bring
    But they ain't alway around when shit hits the fan
    Are you your brothers keeper , or just another street sweeper
    Are we on the deen by showing we better than how we was pre deen
    Or are we just wiser and older like your college form tutor
    If you keep accumulating good , you ain't hording crap
    You only enter jannat through the mercy of your rab
    So let's take a step back without the need for ladders and snakes
    Look through your rear view or turn your head around to scope the crowd
    Are you looking to turn Abu Sufyan because now you got the bigger clique
    Or are you ibn umar , constantly turning away from fitnah
    The real question like the one posed by hamza yusuf
    Are you in Mecca,Medina or Abyssinia
    "If the sea were ink for [writing] the words of my Lord, the sea would be exhausted before the words of my Lord were exhausted, even if We brought the like of it as a supplement."

 

 

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