Sticks and stones... but words...

[Urza26]

Sticks and stones can break my bones
But words can crush my soul
Bricks and all makes not a home
For thine home is in thine soul

And a cold shoulder is colder than winter
And your warm laughter is warmer than summer
Cause sticks and stones can break my bones
But words can crush my soul

All that glitters is not gold
Ah.. for a lowly price some souls are sold
And some souls unsold, a golden mold
For though unseen, a glittering gold.

And so sticks and stones can break my bones
But words can crush my soul
And so many are those who build their thrones
But their souls their thrones control

So stay a while till the end
And stand with me my fine fair friend
So stay a while till morning's dew...
Cause sticks and stones can break my bones
But your sweet smile mends my soul anew

[Qalqilya]

Mashallah. I like the way its a bit of poetry, story and song.

Inspiration?

[the_middle_road]

Sticks and stones can break my bones
But words can crush my soul

Masha Allah, I like this. I always thought the original was a bit silly. This is more truthful.

[Zesty]

Lovely mashaAllah
Always hated that saying- the original one. Never made sense to me. Bruises and bones will heal but how do you heal a heart scarred with words of hate.

[Urza26]

Mashallah. I like the way its a bit of poetry, story and song.

Inspiration?

I was taking a fun quiz involving some common English sayings. I noted that the stones rhymes with bones which sounds like soul. From there the poem basically wrote itself.

"Bricks and ... makes not a home" is from the game Diablo 1. Based on what the witch says. Modification to 'Old English' based on the Dragonlance Twins Triology's poem for activating the staff of Magius (Thine time is thine own).

"Cold shoulder" yet another common English phrase.

"All that glitters is not gold"... based on a song... Can't remember who sang it... but it goes... "There's a lady who thinks... all that glitters is gold and she's buying a stairway to heaven..." This paragraph is a sort of reference to her... Or at least those who have her mentality.

"And so many are those... but... their thrones control". About dictators having a lot of power and the need to maintain that power controlling them. Their own power controlling them, not they controlling their power. Well maybe not just dictators, but the powerful in general. Or even someone who is controlled fully by their wealth.

"So stay a while..." is another Diablo reference (Cain). And I also wanted something positive in the end to counter the hopelessness. As in.. if words can crush a spirit, they also can bring warmth and happiness if used wisely.

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Does that make sense? Haha... maybe it's a jumble of ideas, but usually when I write, there's like a ton of ideas jostling and phrases each other around until they sort of mesh together.

And yeah... I never believed the original one that says words can never hurt me. Of course they can... Words are the ones that hurt the most... And right now I have an overwhelming sense of De Ja Vu... Hmm... Been having a lot of that since youth...

[Reflection09]

Sticks and stones can break my bones
But words can crush my soul
Bricks and all makes not a home
For thine home is in thine soul

And a cold shoulder is colder than winter
And your warm laughter is warmer than summer
Cause sticks and stones can break my bones
But words can crush my soul

All that glitters is not gold
Ah.. for a lowly price some souls are sold
And some souls unsold, a golden mold
For though unseen, a glittering gold.

And so sticks and stones can break my bones
But words can crush my soul
And so many are those who build their thrones
But their souls their thrones control

So stay a while till the end
And stand with me my fine fair friend
So stay a while till morning's dew...
Cause sticks and stones can break my bones
But your sweet smile mends my soul anew

Beautiful

[Sirius]

And a cold shoulder is colder than winter

You play with words beautifully!

Really, really lovely.

[scribble]

^ so true...

Words still hurt me years on. =(

[Illest]

[Hamza Momand]

nice

but
alas we cant get more of these beautiful poems by brother urza.

[tabasam]

I'm mad about poetry and I absolutely love this one. So keep on

[Worried Soul]

please can i spread the poem? it's got a deep meaning in between the lines alhamdulilah

[Urza26]

I'm currently collecting my poetry and other works from all across the internet. Came here to do the same and saw your comment. I'm glad you liked it. Sure, you can spread it if you want, but I hope you can post the link to this thread when you do...

Thanks and God bless.

[Urza26]

I'm mad about poetry and I absolutely love this one. So keep on

Thank you and glad you liked it... But I won't be around on this site anymore... Only came here to collect and compile my works (thanks Hiking for the suggestion)...

But there's plenty of other poems that I wrote before this, just search for my username under the poetry forum.