Train Track

[Chained_Water]

Train track,
We flow, we don’t chug,
We gently jerk from side to side,
We almost fly,
Movement goes from fast, to slow on the horizon,
Whats further away stays with us longer,
Its impression is stonger,
It creates our landscape,
What’s closer just fades,
There’s never clarity,
All detail and meaning lost in blurred motion,
I digress on the scenary that’s stamped -
In my eyes, on my mind,
I travel backwards, facing the past,
So vast,
I fly through but I'm so still,
I barely hear announcements or see the signs,
Instead I’m lost completely in this journey of mine,
People board and alight at different stages,
So many faces and intersecting lives,
I inspect them from the corners of my eyes,
I wouldn’t like my own sight anymore,
So I avoid reflections in windows and doors,
Reflect on valleys and moors,
The strangest trees I’ve ever seen,
All the shades of grey and green,
The way that they merge,
Heaviness surges,
The air is so thin outside,
Cities choking under cloudy skies,
Nothing’s really loud in the scheme -
Of things the world is full of silence,
And stillness,
We’re little vibrations on some parts of the surface,
We’re atomic and yes like the bomb,
We’re just dying with pomp,
Real movement is in trees,
The winds in the leaves the world over,
Train tracks,
A window to the world,
A gallery of maladies –
We’ve unleashed,
And the cure in the uninhabited peace,
The blackest blackness I’ve seen,
Vast spaces splayed so far,
White birds and they’re not flying,
Is joy dying?
Where am I going in these cold winds,
What’s to be found there at the end,
All I see anywhere is branches and leaves,
Eyes comforted, cool, fooled.

[scribble]

It's an entire metaphor! Isn't it?

[Chained_Water]

What's it a metaphor for in your eyes sis?

[ibn suleman]

i keep reading the title as train wreck :S

[urban_rose]

another great one, mashAllah!

this line is such a cool way of expressing that idea :inlove:

We’re atomic and yes like the bomb

:love:

[Chained_Water]

i keep reading the title as train wreck :S
You're being morbid, my stuff must be rubbing off on you :p

urby: :jkk: for the kind words sis :o

[Joha]

I digress on the scenary that’s stamped -

I barely hear announcements or see the signs,

Eyes comforted, cool, fooled.

:up: Jk sis, that last line strikes a chord.

Maybe I read your poem completely wrong but it reminded me of Iris (an elegy) by David St. John - might just've been the train theme, come to think of it.


Vivian St. John (1981-1974)

There is a train inside this iris:

You think I'm crazy, & like to say boyish
& outrageous things. No, there is

A train inside this iris.

It's a child's finger bearded in black banners.
A single window like a child's nail,

A darkened porthole lit by the white, angular face

Of an old woman, or perhaps the boy beside her in the stuffy,
Hot compartment. Her hair is silver, & sweeps

Back off her forehead, onto her cold and bruised shoulders.

The prairies fail along Chicago. Past the five
Lakes. Into the black woods of her New York; & as I bend

Close above the iris, I see the train

Drive deep into the damp heart of its stem, & the gravel
Of the garden path

Cracks under my feet as I walk this long corridor

Of elms, arched
Like the ceiling of a French railway pier where a boy

With pale curls holding

A fresh iris is waving goodbye to a grandmother, gazing
A long time

Into the flower, as if he were looking some great

Distance, or down an empty garden path & he believes a man
Is walking toward him, working

Dull shears in one hand; & now believe me: The train

Is gone. The old woman is dead, & the boy. The iris curls,
On its stalk, in the shade

Of those elms: Where something like the icy & bitter fragrance

In the wake of a woman who's just swept past you on her way
Home

& you remain.

[scribble]

What's it a metaphor for in your eyes sis?

I'm not so sure sis. I just.... you tell me? Did you write it as a metaphor or just as a poem?

[ibn suleman]

You're being morbid, my stuff must be rubbing off on you :p

urby: :jkk: for the kind words sis :o

LOL..nah is cos on the thread list it has

Train Track
Chained_Water


and well the way i read...the W is getting mixed up :p



good poem masha'Allah :up: