Like Romeo before Juliet, Like Majnoon after Layla

[Chained_Water]

The sun's shining outside,
But my curtains are closed,
There’s a cooling breeze outside,
But the air in my lungs stagnates,
Like Romeo before Juliet,
Nocturnal in self-made darkness,
Drowning alone in loss,
Before finding love,
As deep as a heartbeat,
Or the sigh of a soul,
Discovery that disarms,
Then destroys its home,
Like Majnoon after Layla,
In the sweltering heat,
Of a passionate yearning,
Poetry in each tear,
Heartache in each kiss,
Through a dog or brick,
Reaching out for you,
Helplessly burning inside.

The day’s bright outside,
But my curtains are closed,
Gentle breeze through the trees,
But every leaf I touch rots,
Like a perverse cursed Midas,
With a garden of thorns,
No roses just a lawn of corpses,
Dead dreams that I’d seen,
Too precious and fragile,
Fractured upon my touch,
Now nourishing weeds and vines,
Overgrown to cover windows,
Open eyes unable to see you,
Overflow with stinging tears,
Like Psyche crying for Eros,
A mythical lie to hurt minds,
Every lover's dead or dying,
There’s nothing great in that pain,
Insurmountable tasks remain that way,
No test would bring you back to me,
Love immortal only in delusions,
Still this pathogenic burning inside.

[MMS]

sub kuch bhula diya yeh wafa ka kesa sila diya :crying:

[Chained_Water]

sub kuch bhula diya yeh wafa ka kesa sila diya :crying:
emo + bollywood = :scratch:

[ibn suleman]

whats an emo?

[Khuram_2k?]

emotion i guess

[Chained_Water]

whats an emo?
like a goth but more depressive, nihilistic, pessimistic..

[MMS always calls me one]

[ibn suleman]

like a goth but more depressive, nihilistic, pessimistic..

[MMS always calls me one]

goths are the long black haired leather wearing ones?

hmm..thats not good thing then...

[Chained_Water]

goths are the long black haired leather wearing ones?

hmm..thats not good thing then...
erm goths don't always wear leather, they just tend to wear black clothing and makeup, and emos are similarly dark but moreso in their mental state.

[ibn suleman]

erm goths don't always wear leather, they just tend to wear black clothing and makeup, and emos are similarly dark but moreso in their mental state.

oh..:scratch:

i used google..and it came up with:rubeyes:


Definitions of goth on the Web:
peasant: a crude uncouth ill-bred person lacking culture or refinement
one of the Teutonic people who invaded the Roman Empire in the 3rd to 5th centuries
wordnet.princeton.edu/perl/webwn (http://www.google.co.uk/url?sa=X&start=0&oi=define&q=http://wordnet.princeton.edu/perl/webwn%3Fs%3Dgoth&usg=AFQjCNHTj-LAVLoh03C-PrFdThEqs0Mqyg)Goth is a board game where progress is determined by a player's ability to answer horror-related trivia and popular culture questions. The game was invented by Matthew Nuccio and manufactured in 2002 by McNutty Games. ...
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Goth (game) (http://www.google.co.uk/url?sa=X&start=2&oi=define&q=http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Goth+%28game%29&usg=AFQjCNFm1lnq6eXbL0RbW9cblC3KroqV4Q)Goth is a one volume manga based on a novel by Otsu-ichi and illustrated by Kendi Oiwa. It was published in Japan by Kadokawa Comics.
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Goth (manga) (http://www.google.co.uk/url?sa=X&start=3&oi=define&q=http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Goth+%28manga%29&usg=AFQjCNGvU_olYYZyxmJY1a29S152YH0f6w)

[ibn suleman]

i guess the peasant one is the one u mean?

[Chained_Water]

that was totally wrong :rubeyes:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Goth_subculture
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Emo

[MMS]

i dont mean itin the rock music way :p

i mean it as in those people that write depressing poetry and are kinda outcasts in scoiety but thats the way they want to be :p

[ibn suleman]

that was totally wrong :rubeyes:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Goth_subculture
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Emo

oh..its to do rock music and that...:rubeyes:

[Chained_Water]

i dont mean itin the rock music way :p

i mean it as in those people that write depressing poetry and are kinda outcasts in scoiety but thats the way they want to be :p
Yeh I know.. it's kinda briefly mentioned in that article half way down.. 'cuz they listen to that certain depressing type of music too.. I didn't know they were known for poetry :S

And are you trying to say I'm an outcast in society when you call me an emo then? :torture:

[MMS]

Yeh I know.. it's kinda briefly mentioned in that article half way down.. 'cuz they listen to that certain depressing type of music too.. I didn't know they were known for poetry :S

And are you trying to say I'm an outcast in society when you call me an emo then? :torture:

noooo :o:o well maybe i dont know how emo you are in real life :o

[Chained_Water]

noooo :o:o well maybe i dont know how emo you are in real life :o
I go through phases :o ..sometimes I'm totally anti-social and won't call or text anyone for ages.. other times I'm in the thick of the action and being a really :D and :love: with everyone in sight ..bit of a bipolar britney you could say :p

The real question is how bollywood are YOU in real life? Have you ever hugged a tree or ran across a field/hill with outstetched arms whilst singing a love song?

[MMS]

I go through phases :o ..sometimes I'm totally anti-social and won't call or text anyone for ages.. other times I'm in the thick of the action and being a really :D and :love: with everyone in sight ..bit of a bipolar britney you could say :p

The real question is how bollywood are YOU in real life? Have you ever hugged a tree or ran across a field/hill with outstetched arms whilst singing a love song?

i dont watch bollywood, ive never been to the cinema apart from once but that was part of my college course) and i dont watch their channels or movies
apart from mohabbatein which i watched time ago and i have been :inlove: ever since

lol i hear the songs here n there n my brain just picks up the lyrics :smack:

im not as obsessed as i make out on the forum (its just to be annoying :D )

[Chained_Water]

Aww, that is cute :o ..you're not so bollywood afterall :eek: ..you just totally shattered your image though ya know :p

So do you think you could be like an Urdu poet with your lyrical skills? I think you should compose some original MMS urdu poetry :D

[the_middle_road]

like a goth but more depressive, nihilistic, pessimistic..

[MMS always calls me one]

Some of your posts and poems do make you seem like one. :outta:

[Chained_Water]

Some of your posts and poems do make you seem like one. :outta:
There is nothing about my normal posts that make me seem like an emo.. but I do concede that my poetry may well give that impression :o

[MMS]

Aww, that is cute :o ..you're not so bollywood afterall :eek: ..you just totally shattered your image though ya know :p

So do you think you could be like an Urdu poet with your lyrical skills? I think you should compose some original MMS urdu poetry :D

i cant write urdu poetry :rubeyes:
i only jack the naat lyrics :o:o coz im soo :inlove: with them or sometimes my rents tell me to go and learn this or that

im not much of a poet actually, i suppose the words just come to you as you write?? because you seem to write a lot
do you write about feelings or about anything? and how long do your poems take you to write?

im not very expressive of my feelings so its awkward and difficult putting them down in writing you feel kinda exposed if u know what i mean?

i have to put too much brain power into it when i do decide to write something (which is hardly ever)
it doesnt flow naturally :(

[Chained_Water]

i cant write urdu poetry :rubeyes:
i only jack the naat lyrics :o:o coz im soo :inlove: with them or sometimes my rents tell me too go and learn this or that

im not much of a poet actually, i suppose the words just come to you as you write?? because you seem to write a lot
do you write about feelings or about anything? and how long do your poems take you to write?

im not very expressive of my feelings so its awkward and difficult putting them down in writing you feel kinda exposed if u know what i mean?

i have to put too much brain power into it when i do decide to write something (which is hardly ever)
it doesnt flow naturally :(

I love writing I guess.. and creating.. and poetry is probably the best way for me because it's beautiful, expressive, multi-faceted and I'm not patient enough to commit to prose [I've tried many times and always leave things incomplete].. Plus being a writer has always been a pipe dream of mine and the one lasting ambition through all my changes of heart, so make dua I get the patience for it :o

It takes me no time at all to write, at least it doesn't feel like it does.. it does just come itself mostly.. sometimes you need to search for the right words though.. sometimes it half comes naturally but isn't complete and you need to put some mental effort in to get the rest out.. ..what I really hate though is when I have no pen/paper/computer and a poem just comes to me, I've lost loads like that :smack:

I write about anything*, thoughts, weird ideas, incidents, other peoples situations or words, my own feelings, some themes I just like to write about [depression, love, religion being the common ones] ..I don't feel exposed, because noone really knows what it's about but me, they can assume but that'd be their own assumptions not necessarily the truth.. also half the time people attach their own meanings to things and relate to it in their own way, but only you can see your words through your own eyes and know where it comes from..

It would be wrong if people thought by reading my stuff they could know what's going on in my life, heart or head. I kinda do hate the idea of people thinking they can psycho-analyse me from my stuff, but I know they can't :buttkick: so it doesn't bother me enough to not share it.



*one of my faves is the one about my tea and my messy desk (http://word-flow.blogspot.com/2007/01/cup-of-tea.html) :rubeyes: just cuz of how it sounds in my head and remembering when I wrote it.

[Stylish-Girly]

Lots of love and heartaches goin on in Ummah, nice piece

[Chained_Water]

Lots of love and heartaches goin on in Ummah, nice piece
:jkk: but this had nowt to do with ummah.. there shouldn't be any love or heartache here.. what would the mummies and daddies say :nono:

:p

[Stylish-Girly]

:jkk: but this had nowt to do with ummah.. there shouldn't be any love or heartache here.. what would the mummies and daddies say :nono:

:p

Na i didnt mean it in that way lol i meant the people on eya experiencin alot of loves and heartaches in their personal lives, not directly thru Ummah members but you know wa i mean :confused:

[MMS]

I love writing I guess.. and creating.. and poetry is probably the best way for me because it's beautiful, expressive, multi-faceted and I'm not patient enough to commit to prose [I've tried many times and always leave things incomplete].. Plus being a writer has always been a pipe dream of mine and the one lasting ambition through all my changes of heart, so make dua I get the patience for it :o

It takes me no time at all to write, at least it doesn't feel like it does.. it does just come itself mostly.. sometimes you need to search for the right words though.. sometimes it half comes naturally but isn't complete and you need to put some mental effort in to get the rest out.. ..what I really hate though is when I have no pen/paper/computer and a poem just comes to me, I've lost loads like that :smack:

I write about anything*, thoughts, weird ideas, incidents, other peoples situations or words, my own feelings, some themes I just like to write about [depression, love, religion being the common ones] ..I don't feel exposed, because noone really knows what it's about but me, they can assume but that'd be their own assumptions not necessarily the truth.. also half the time people attach their own meanings to things and relate to it in their own way, but only you can see your words through your own eyes and know where it comes from..

It would be wrong if people thought by reading my stuff they could know what's going on in my life, heart or head. I kinda do hate the idea of people thinking they can psycho-analyse me from my stuff, but I know they can't :buttkick: so it doesn't bother me enough to not share it.



*one of my faves is the one about my tea and my messy desk (http://word-flow.blogspot.com/2007/01/cup-of-tea.html) :rubeyes: just cuz of how it sounds in my head and remembering when I wrote it.

BUT did i ask for your BIODATA tho :rubeyes::rubeyes:

:p was it real kashimiri tea?? because kashmiri tea is pink :D and if guests are at my house and mum makes it and everyones like :rubeyes: wow never seen anything like it
I liked the poem tho :up:

i had written quite a few poems in the past but i never shared them with people :p except one i think i put up on ummah a while ago
http://www.ummah.com/forum/showthread.php?t=79952

i do read other people's poetry and short stories, but its difficult to find that stuff that really keeps a hold on you and you can read it all the way through
i like amir sulaimans poetry

She said i prefer a broken neck to another broken heart (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xHnHvgciGmk&feature=related)

Danger (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WczGIhmaJ_M&feature=related)

but now he's started to use music in his poetry and kinda turned it into rap :(

[Chained_Water]

Ohh spoken word, yeh I've heard some that were good but can't remember who it was not this guy though.. some Palestinian woman..

Interesting line about treating pregnancy like an STD :rubeyes:

I like yours.. post more :torture: ..who was that one about.. a particular case?

[Chained_Water]

Whoaaaa.. Danger was totally killer :up: ..he's good!

[~Warda~]

One again sis, loved it!:up:

what I really hate though is when I have no pen/paper/computer and a poem just comes to me, I've lost loads like that



I know what u mean, that happens to me ALL the time!:mad:

[Medievalist]

mashaALLAH gud poem :up: