Soldiers In Gods Eyes

[Al-Irhaab]

hmmm was posted before cant seem to find it

For all the muslim prisoners all over the world
wherever they are wherever they're from
you're people have not forgotten you
we have not forsaken you
we will always remember your sacrifices
always pray for you always love you
don't forget us on the day of qiyamah
don't forget us in jannah

to my brothers Ahmed, Abid ,
Abul Rehman, Muhammed Alfa
stay true to you're promise in the akhira
as you stayed true to you're promise in the dunya
remember me in qiyamah and pray for me.....



how a mother cries
for her son locked away
struggling to survive
dreaming of a better day

the son carried in her womb
who left her so cruelly
left to die for a better life
in his heart he loved her truely

I guess it must be difficult
for any mother to understand
how her son could leave her
gone to a different land

mother said she hated you
but every night she shed tears
the slightest pain to you
that was the peak of her fears

but brother don't feel hurt
her pain is less than the pride
for having you as her son
one day you will be at her side


so much honour she holds
how jealous her friends
for upon her the Lord
his blessings surely sends

so many tears shed
for brothers in cages
we ignore their pleas
for the love of our wages

tried to shed tears
shed tears of real sorrow
but forgot how to cry
any tears would be hollow

torture,humiliation and suffering
is this destined as you're fate
but the greatest reward
will not be too long a wait

you chose you're own path
you chose you're own way
in the not distant future
with hoors you will play

most of you have never seen me
dont even know of my name
but you're all my brothers
our story is one and the same

we might be from different mothers
but we're brothers in Islams eyes
we might have different paths
but we all soldiers in gods eyes

[ur_yusra]

nice.

[Al-Irhaab]

bump

[Chained_Water]

definately yours.. the appalling spelling and grammar gives it away :rolleyes:

but mashaAllah, 'tis nice all the same :)

[Al-Irhaab]

definately yours.. the appalling spelling and grammar gives it away :rolleyes:

but mashaAllah, 'tis nice all the same :)

where is the spelling mistakes and grammar :rubeyes:

[Chained_Water]

hmmm was posted before cant seem to find it

For all the muslim prisoners all over the world
wherever they are wherever they're from
you're people have not forgotten you
we have not forsaken you
we will always remember your sacrifices
always pray for you always love you
don't forget us on the day of qiyamah
don't forget us in jannah

to my brothers Ahmed, Abid ,
Abul Rehman, Muhammed Alfa
stay true to you're promise in the akhira
as you stayed true to you're promise in the dunya
remember me in qiyamah and pray for me.....



how a mother cries
for her son locked away
struggling to survive
dreaming of a better day

the son carried in her womb
who left her so cruelly
left to die for a better life
in his heart he loved her truely

I guess it must be difficult
for any mother to understand
how her son could leave her
gone to a different land

mother said she hated you
but every night she shed tears
the slightest pain to you
that was the peak of her fears

but brother don't feel hurt
her pain is less than the pride
for having you as her son
one day you will be at her side


so much honour she holds
how jealous her friends
for upon her the Lord
his blessings surely sends

so many tears shed
for brothers in cages
we ignore their pleas
for the love of our wages

tried to shed tears
shed tears of real sorrow
but forgot how to cry
any tears would be hollow

torture,humiliation and suffering
is this destined as you're fate
but the greatest reward
will not be too long a wait

you chose you're own path
you chose you're own way
in the not distant future
with hoors you will play

most of you have never seen me
dont even know of my name
but you're all my brothers
our story is one and the same

we might be from different mothers
but we're brothers in Islams eyes
we might have different paths
but we all soldiers in gods eyes


Also each line should have a comma at the end, each new line a capital letter.. there are commas missing in the middle of some lines too.. and generally it is very rushed and minor editing could have made it much slicker.

Sorry, can't help it.. it's the teacher in me speaking :D

[Al-Irhaab]

Also each line should have a comma at the end, each new line and capital letter.. there are commas missing in the middle of some lines too.. and generally it is very rushed and minor editing could have made it much slicker.

Sorry, can't help it.. it's the teacher in me speaking :D

ok the spelling i agree with the other grammar bits no because its a different style of writing... either way my editer is getting sacked... they were supposed to check and correct... but they did nothing :torture:

[Chained_Water]

Compare to: http://www.ummah.com/forum/showthread.php?t=92258

Just grammar, punctuation and layout.

Not quality of content (it is evident you will lose in that anyway!). :D

[ur_yusra]

ok the spelling i agree with the other grammar bits no because its a different style of writing... either way my editer is getting sacked... they were supposed to check and correct... but they did nothing :torture:

Editor*

:rolleyes:

[Chained_Water]

Editor*

:rolleyes:
:rotfl:

[Al-Irhaab]

Editor*

:rolleyes:

shame u can correct my spelling now but couldnt correct it when i gave u that poem isnt it :rolleyes:

[uhkt_al'muminun]

Ibn Taymiyyah (rh) said upon entering his prison cell:
"And thereupon a wall will be raised between them, with a gate in it. Within it will be grace and mercy, and the outside thereof suffering." (Al-Qur'aan 57:13)

[Al-Irhaab]

Compare to: http://www.ummah.com/forum/showthread.php?t=92258

Just grammar, punctuation and layout.

Not quality of content (it is evident you will lose in that anyway!). :D

all the best writers had bad grammar and punctuation... they concentrate on the essence and then let the hired work do the little things like that :D

[Chained_Water]

shame u can correct my spelling now but couldnt correct it when i gave u that poem isnt it :rolleyes:
:eek: So now we know who your Editor was :rotfl: :D

Well this looks like a clear cut case of sabotage.. all is fair in love and war :mujahida: ..well done private yusra, report back to SVC headquarters for your next mission :coolsis:

[Chained_Water]

all the best writers had bad grammar and punctuation... they concentrate on the essence and then let the hired work do the little things like that :D
All the best writers had respect for little things like punctuation, spelling and grammar, which are the cornerstones of communication using the written word :smack:

:1popcorn:Eats, shoots :bang:and leaves Mister :rolleyes:

[ur_yusra]

I wasn't told to edit anything :S

[Al-Irhaab]

All the best writers had respect for little things like punctuation, spelling and grammar, which are the cornerstones of communication using the written word :smack:

:1popcorn:Eats, shoots :bang:and leaves Mister :rolleyes:

actually no... have u ever read roald dahls originals... the spelling etc was apalling... because he never concentrated on it... he did the work and then the editors corrected it and did the layout etc etc :cool:

[RaNdOm]

Ibn Taymiyyah (rh) said upon entering his prison cell:
"And thereupon a wall will be raised between them, with a gate in it. Within it will be grace and mercy, and the outside thereof suffering." (Al-Qur'aan 57:13)


:salams

:up::up::up: hmmmmm

[Al-Irhaab]

I wasn't told to edit anything :S

so ur denying ever editing the above text :rolleyes:

[Chained_Water]

actually no... have u ever read roald dahls originals... the spelling etc was apalling... because he never concentrated on it... he did the work and then the editors corrected it and did the layout etc etc :cool:
story telling and writing are two different things.. the difference might be too subtle for a plank to spot though so don't worry :D

[ur_yusra]

so ur denying ever editing the above text :rolleyes:

Yes.. :scratch:

[Al-Irhaab]

story telling and writing are two different things.. the difference might be too subtle for a plank to spot though so don't worry :D

i tell storys in my writing... that is the difference between true poetry and just written poetry ;)

[Al-Irhaab]

Yes.. :scratch:

tut tut shame shame

[Chained_Water]

i tell storys in my writing... that is the difference between true poetry and just written poetry ;)
Oh please, learn to spell and use english and then tell us about true poetry.. you can barely string a ryhme together, don't get 'appy 'cuz we're being nice to you.. it's the subject matter that is getting the positive response, not your lack of skills :D

[Al-Irhaab]

Oh please, learn to spell and use english and then tell us about true poetry.. you can barely string a ryhme together, don't get 'appy 'cuz we're being nice to you.. it's the subject matter that is getting the positive response, not your lack of skills :D

there aint no lack of skills mashallah... no need to get jealous now... what is it with teachers ... ive seen that most teachers are jealous of natural talent :cool:

[Chained_Water]

there aint no lack of skills mashallah... no need to get jealous now... what is it with teachers ... ive seen that most teachers are jealous of natural talent :cool:
What a horrible allegation to make :torture:

Teachers search for talent, they help people recognise talent and develop it.

So shurrup :torture:

[Al-Irhaab]

What a horrible allegation to make :torture:

Teachers search for talent, they help people recognise talent and develop it.

So shurrup :torture:

teachers look for people to teach... they dont look for talent... i mean back in the days have u seen finding forrester... thats what teachers are like :torture:

anyway read the other two poems tell me what youse think :D

[Nusayba bint Ka'b]

Beautiful Poem touches the heart.
:jkk: Akhi

[$HugoBoss$]

Yes very nice poem indeed :)