Poetry Tennis

[Kal-El]

I got this idea from another forum. The rules are that you create a poem, but you have to start with the last one of the previous person's poem.

[Kal-El]

Time and time again, we're taken to this to place where we refuse to open our eyes, where love replaced hate
There's this longing to escape the reflection of this broken mirror
Back to the comfort of our youthful dreams,
(Eyes wide shut) - appreciating those nights where blissful touches won

And yet there's this hunger to see this all for what it is,
These words, that pour onto my palms, so slowly - so lovingly
I need you to see this for what it is - I need you to love me as your husband
Are you strong enough, to take me to a place where blind men see

[`asiya]

Are you strong enough, to take me to a place where blind men see
not now that i have kriptonite with me,
the tights grow saggy
and the cape dont fly
and no longer can i call u super guy

:rolleyes:

[Eemaan]

and no longer can i call u super guy
cos your so fly
and high
yes your my superfly high guy
who like to eat butterflies

[Kal-El]

Who like to eat butterflies
And make up lies - about the super guys?

Take these dreams?
I'm making those mine!
No time for thoughts, no more breaths for doubts,
From the shine of that star - to the heart beats in the deepest of ocean - for you, there is no place I wouldn't sacrifice!

From the soft coolness of the clouds, to the lights of the milky way that reign free; you've now taken me to that place where blind men could see!

For the first, and last time, I'm strong enough to make these words mine

[Ibn-e-Muslim]

for the first, and last time im strong enuff to make these words mine
to see the light high up in the sky
while counting the brids starting from number nine
say cheer to my brother who just disapeared by
oh u greedy ones, b happy n proud while u dine
i see the word not close enuf
its simple n comon im a broken shrine

:scratch:

[Kal-El]

for the first, and last time im strong enuff to make these words mine
to see the light high up in the sky
while counting the brids starting from number nine
say cheer to my brother who just disapeared by
oh u greedy ones, b happy n proud while u dine
i see the word not close enuf
its simple n comon im a broken shrine

:scratch:

It's simple and common, I'm a broken shrine
For I have sinned for the very last time;
Washed the stains of your Pride

In this dark water I remain; with only thoughts of you;
I'm no Shakespeare, and I don't even need a mic to rhyme
I'm not slick, and I swear this is no trick - but I click as i sigh when dreaming of you
And I'm quick when I'm picking you - watch how I walk my with stick. It's tick tick, tick my dear

And so here I go again, another night.
It's just a fright they tell me - it's just another fight (I miss you)
Well this wannabe soldier is shaking. Aching. Breaking.

I've become your broken shrine..

[Eemaan]

I've become your broken shrine..
and now i want a goldmine
so i can shine :inlove:
Kal this thread is killing me

[ibn suleman]

Kal this thread is killing me
but don't worry, soon everyone will see

[Kal-El]

But dont worry, soon everyone will see
You don't need a cape to feel this high - you'll agree
For you shall ride those tides to the bottom of the sea;
You will swerve with the wind, and dash through the air we breathe - and still, you'll try to deny,
That I don't need a cape to feel this high

[ibn suleman]

That you don't need a cape to feel this high
as long as you have a dream, you can always fly!

[Kal-El]

As long as you have a dream, you can always fly
To that, we all testify :)

Although it's the theme of the supreme, You don't need to change a regime to dream,
Remember remember,

[Noor]

remember remember
those days of innocene
those care free days
where we would run around
without a care in the world
where computer games
were a play of the rich
oh the bike rides
oh the games
what has happened to lost days of our childhood

[ibn suleman]

deleted

sis 'asiya posted something much better :up:

[`asiya]

what has happened to lost days of our childhood,
teepees and tommahawks
tea sets and candy floss
no t.vs or telephones
puppet shows and bunny rabbits
then we learned the adults habits...

[`asiya]

phew just on time insha allah jazakallahu khair bruv

[ibn suleman]

-deleted- :D
you didn't see nothing

[Ibn-e-Muslim]

what has happened to lost days of our childhood,
teepees and tommahawks
tea sets and candy floss
no t.vs or telephones
puppet shows and bunny rabbits
then we learned the adults habits...

then we learned the adults habbits
driving fast, wearing chains n lether jackets
sensible laughs at such people full of nonsense
when men incharge r bunch of bandits
always wondring who is ugly who is deadly
when one cud help one hungry help one needy but no1 cares no1 admits
we r proud we dont care who lives who dies
is that how we like to b called ignorents?

:zzz:

[Eemaan]

is that how we like to b called ignorents?
or are you just belligerant?
or an off the shore immigrant?

[Ebony]

Lol...this is fun :D

I cant rhyme to save myself..but i shall watch from afar :1popcorn:

[Hayaa]

I cant rhyme to save myself..but i shall watch from afar
"I cant rhyme to save myself..
but i shall watch from afar"
once you get started, though
you'll be soon shooting
for the stars :D

[Eemaan]

"I cant rhyme to save myself..
but i shall watch from afar"
once you get started, though
you'll be soon shooting
for the stars :D

for the stars
or for a packet of mini mars
(which are haraam)
i will stay always in your arms

[Hayaa]

i will stay always in your arms

I will stay always in your arms
never to go away
even if you dont want me
i'll make sure none of us go astray

[Kal-El]

for the stars
or for a packet of mini mars
(which are haraam)
i will stay always in your arms

I will stay always in your arms,
Hoping you fall for those old childhood charms -
(Remember?) You know when we used to write poetry? When we used to share Ice Cream? ..the ones i used to steal from your friend Marie? :p
The way we used to dream..

Those were the days :rolleyes:

You see my dear; Life's a bit like a picture - our memories are frozen in time
..(wish I had a picture at that time I set alight your hair, you called me slime - yeah..yea..but i heard 'sublime' ;) )

So this one's for you :) ...

[Ibn-e-Muslim]

for the stars
or for a packet of mini mars
(which are haraam)
i will stay always in your arms

i will stay always in ur arms
oh dear mom oh dear mom

i remember the day u beat me with stick
i enjoyed the love in ur breaths

since u r gone i miss u alot
oh momy i still remember those lovely tricks

u wanted me to become a wise man
im sorry i lost it again

i pray to Allah to grant u higher place in janah
thats all i can offer oh my dear mama



dont get me wrong here al7amdulilah my momy is alive, n beating me more often mashaAllah:inlove:

[`asiya]

thats all i can offer oh my dear mamma
only my prayers to Allah ta ala
that He guide u to His way
because u cant hear what i say
although i try you can`t see
home is full of hindu deities
who need u to wash them
and feed them
and clothe them
and yet you beleive they have control of everything
may Allah ta ala guide you to His way
because u can`t hear what i say...

[Eemaan]

because u can`t hear what i say...
because you need to pay
for the water to stay (on)
as its going to blow like a bomb
and i dont like singing this song
as it pongs

[Ibn-e-Muslim]

because you need to pay
for the water to stay (on)
as its going to blow like a bomb
and i dont like singing this song
as it pongs

and i dont like singing a song as it pongs
im to nerdy to play ping pong
eat icecream eat sandwiches
and play an old video game donkey kong
do u hear me scream?
yeah right, i dont like u singing this song


:D

[Kal-El]

and i dont like singing a song as it pongs
im to nerdy to play ping pong
eat icecream eat sandwiches
and play an old video game donkey kong
do u hear me scream?
yeah right, i dont like u singing this song


:D

Yea right, I don't like you singing this song
In fact - I don't like you playing Ping Pong
Wait, come to think of it, I don't like you at all. Vamoosh. Be gone.
I'm good with the patterns - (my rhyme style is right!)
My readers love the way I Einstein this rhyme
When it comes to messing with lines ..(I can write!)
Some imitate me and some try to bite
Some irritate me that can't read this right
So never tell me this is aint the way to write
But I don't let it phase me because I'm shining bright

Don't need to remind you this spot-light belongs to me..
So why don't you choose the time, and I'll bring the tea :coolbro:

[awwabah]

so why don't you choose the time, and I'll bring the tea
and pour it over bricks and stones for the celebrities
for no one knows how to rhyme the words typed on this board
except geniuses with :coolbro: ? hijab true followers of the Lord
the tea will feed parched lips of clay, and puddle in a maze
and little hungry kittens rush to drink their fill and praise
sweet natured hijabis who so kindly saved the day
pouring sugared tea with milk while others were at play

:)

[Ibn-e-Muslim]

so why don't you choose the time, and I'll bring the tea
and pour it over bricks and stones for the celebrities
for no one knows how to rhyme the words typed on this board
except geniuses with :coolbro: ? hijab true followers of the Lord
the tea will feed parched lips of clay, and puddle in a maze
and little hungry kittens rush to drink their fill and praise
sweet natured hijabis who so kindly saved the day
pouring sugared tea with milk while others were at play

:)
thats a good 1 bro

pouring sugared tea with milk while others were at play
i ate all the mangoes which were layin on the clay

do u cook food while music is on the play?
thats not good, please u must keep ur faith in pray

when i went to market to get sum pineapple cake
i saw a hungry lion up for sale at display

:D

[awwabah]

I saw a hungry lion up for sale at display
he wasn't really lion, more like kitty turned the scales
while all the other kittens sipped at tea and sugared whey
little kitty sprawled a sniffing for a juicy mouse or snail
And there she was poor kitty caught amongst the other beasts
of gigantinormous size and other freckled treats
that call themselves kangaroos from across the ocean blue
if only oh if only she'd been content with lapping goo.

:D

[Ibn-e-Muslim]

I saw a hungry lion up for sale at display
he wasn't really lion, more like kitty turned the scales
while all the other kittens sipped at tea and sugared whey
little kitty sprawled a sniffing for a juicy mouse or snail
And there she was poor kitty caught amongst the other beasts
of gigantinormous size and other freckled treats
that call themselves kangaroos from across the ocean blue
if only oh if only she'd been content with lapping goo.

:D

if only oh if only shed been content with lapping goo
just because she loves to wear leather boots

y does the cow yells moo moo
when the kids throw stones with laughter under the sky blue

i hear i hear u yellin n screaming for food
but i aint sharing coz i dont like you

:D

[awwabah]

but i aint sharing coz i dont like you
watching me clack both mandibles as I chew
and masticate the scraps left out at night
in hotel bins under the grey moonlight.
But come step up and taste the chow one day
when I've eaten my full and passed away! @)


bro ibn Muslim that was a nasty last line
but i aint sharing coz i dont like you
:nono:

[Makki]

but i aint sharing coz i dont like you
watching me clack both mandibles as I chew
and masticate the scraps left out at night
in hotel bins under the grey moonlight.
But come step up and taste the chow one day
when I've eaten my full and passed away! @)


bro ibn Muslim that was a nasty last line
but i aint sharing coz i dont like you
:nono:

when ive eaten my full and passed away
i pray inshallah that i can live in jannah
live a life of no regrets and look back on those days
and smile cause while others were working i prayed to Allah

(erm that was awful ill give you reps to not take the mick ok :up:)

[Ibn-e-Muslim]

bro ibn Muslim that was a nasty last line
but i aint sharing coz i dont like you
:nono:

sorry that wasnt against u or any1, that line just poped up :embar:

[awwabah]

sorry that wasnt against u or any1, that line just poped up

you must do penance, now let me see....

you must write the next post after this;)

wa salam alaykum:D

[Kal-El]

when ive eaten my full and passed away
i pray inshallah that i can live in jannah
live a life of no regrets and look back on those days
and smile cause while others were working i prayed to Allah

(erm that was awful ill give you reps to not take the mick ok :up:)

And smile, cause while others were working I prayed to Allah
We were drawn from the weeds
We were brave like soldiers
Falling down under the pale moonlight

Will I need a kite..
Cos I really feel like you're the closest to heaven I'll ever be
Living tonight; forever with you, forever in me

So let it be

[Hayaa]

And smile, cause while others were working I prayed to Allah
We were drawn from the weeds
We were brave like soldiers
Falling down under the pale moonlight

Will I need a kite..
Cos I really feel like you're the closest to heaven I'll ever be
Living tonight; forever with you, forever in me

So let it be

So let it be..
..the hatred and anarchy
which so devides the world
the carnage created by men
desposing His Work
to engage in merriment
so let it be...
...the state the world's in
shall remain so, for years to come
no mercy, no freedom
that's what the world's sadly become...

[Bizza]

So let it be..
..the hatred and anarchy
which so devides the world
the carnage created by men
desposing His Work
to engage in merriment
so let it be...
...the state the world's in
shall remain so, for years to come
no mercy, no freedom
that's what the world's sadly become...
Our day is yet to come,
So hold your head up high.:D
Blessed with a heavenly smile,
You can overcome your sigh!

When the truth of Allah is there,
As crystal as ice!
Man will have to then decide,
Whether to keep or sacrifice?

We are but one breed,
Born from one seed.
Why oh why must our children,
See our hearts bleed?:(

[awwabah]

See our hearts bleed? No, we're wrapped
too carefully, in ogre layers, green
as onion. Let us peel ourselves
bare the veins and let flow the fluid
that stagnates and chokes our hearts

No, there is no bullet, no bomb
that penetrates these thickened hides.
We watch their hearts explode and spout
tears of blood though the screen.

Their hearts bleed, ours choke
diluted tears from saturated eyes :crying2:

[Kal-El]

This thread has turned out marvelous. Thank you all for your contribution, and lets up the game with our metaphors :up:

One tip of advice; read other poems online and see their structures in terms of the rhyme.

[awwabah]

what's a metaphor???:scratch:

is it a chameleon? that's a log early in the day
light when the dew still hangs ready to spring
from the first leaves; at midday merges
with the moss and grass, and late at night becomes
a slithering snake?

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Metaphor

poems on line aren't the best place to learn poetry technique imho. Best place is a poetry workshop.

wa salam alaykum wa rahmatu Allah

[MalikOne™]

a slithering snake
best believe he aint ya boy he's fake
crossin my path was your biggest mistake
now you got a meetin wit fate
whilst im on ma tea break :coolbro:

[trebor]

Whilst I'm on my tea break.

Whilst I'm on my tea break
I go on ummah dot com.
On there a poem I try to make-
But it just takes too long...

[!--Muzzamil--!]

But Who is the 1 n Only
He has 99 Names, hes the almighty
Hes the biggest poet, 114 Chapters in his book
To him is the return, Ar Rahmaan to Al Sabur

[awwabah]

to him is the return, Alrahman, AlSabour,
The All in Mercy that showers crystal
dew; that slides across the petals of the daisy
and envelopes the tiny strand of grass
struggling through the crack
in the pavement.
The Patience of watching the fetus,
toes kicking against the lifeline
of air and blood, then with a push
head down into the light
and fast expanding lungs

:)

[Supernova Nebula]

And fast expanding lungs
When a song is sung
Let me continue to focus
Alas! There’s too much hocus pocus

Where can I get inspiration
When my heart is full of emotion
When an ambition is too high to reach
When a simple earnest effort is better than a long speech

I long for a company but I also fond of solitude
I know what’s in my heart but people say I have attitude
Is it true life is full of frustration?
Or it’s a mere hallucination?

I’m not sure but I’m also certain
It’s you standing in front of the fountain
Waving at me graciously
Luring me to walk to you hastily

On the way to reach you I almost fell
And this feeling I dwell
Is it really worthwhile?
I’m not sure but I can only smile:)

[!--Muzzamil--!]

Im not sure but I can only smile,
But i feel sad, to get water people walk a mile
when im here just go to the tap
water pours out, then have a nap
But feel for the ummah suffereing
Africa to asia there is no stopping
earthquakes tsunamis n drought
there hopeles, all they can do is shout
but no1 heres there calls
enough food in the world to make most people fat
top 100 richest people could solve all poverty,
Ya Allah Why is this world so greedy

[Supernova Nebula]

Ya Allah why this world so greedy
Leaving the poor and the needy
When the rich wanting to be richer
And leaving the poor getting poorer

IMF and WTO sucking wealth
Making so-called third world countries not in good health
Wanting to blame Bush and the Zionists
But Muslims must not be pessimists

Blaming Bush and the Zionists will not solve our problem
Muslims must act and not make Islam merely an emblem
We used to have our golden days and made history
But we should not only basking in past glory

There used to be a man called Saladdin
Who combined physical strength, wisdom and deen
But now Muslims are imitating Hollywood and Bollywood
Easily trapped like that children story Little Red Riding Hood

[**Saba**]

Easily trapped like that children story Little Red Riding Hood

on she went oblivious of wats ahead
like much of the ummah tht continue to be misled
Our own are dead in places like palestine,
Yet you sit on your behinds, wine and dine.

you dont wanna hear their screams
you dont wanna hear their pleas
wake your dead souls
and smell reality
re-assess your goals
and save yourself from calamity!

[Supernova Nebula]

And save yourself from calamity!
By filling your soul that once empty
Read and understand the Quran and dhikir in your heart
So that you won’t make it black and hard

I’m reminding myself of Hell but putting a hope for Heaven
Cleaning my heart from hatred and malevolent
But doing it alone is not that possible
I need a good company so that I won’t wobble

A friend who reminds and inspires
Whose company keeps me away from worldly desires
Who leads prayers and recites beautifully
Whose words I listen to happily

[awwabah]

whose words? I listen to Happy Lee,
who's never happy on Saturday
Unless the weather cast spells sunny
when he can climb up to his homey tree

but sometimes when the days grow cold
I'll tune in on some Grisly fold
and hear them chant on hibernation
nitrogen masks and petrol stations

even when the sky is brown,
and grime and sweat besmear the town
you'll never hear an ache or groan
We leave all that to Crazy Joan

Yes Crazy Joan is such a fright
she's always moaning day and night
she screams her way down the woods
until her voice smears and floods,
the lanes and gardens across the way
and wilts and shrivels grass and hay.


So that is why when words are there
swept indescriminately through the air
We'll listen to grisleys and happy lees
but steer a path clear off the trees

:)

[trebor]

Steer a path clear of the trees.
Steer a path clear of the trees
and it also helps to avoid bees...
Life is a journey, each to his own;
I was lost, till the right path I was shown.

You shouldn't force anyone walk with you,
you can only point them the right way- thats the issue.
If you're not letting people find their own way
you're being a thug and God'll make you pay.

But on my walk
with God I can talk
he's been gracious to me
and his guidance is free.

[awwabah]

and His Guidance is free
for those who are guided
to take the first steps
to the path of belief.

for His Way is for free,
to those whom a compass
a map and some climbing
is no matter of grief.

map and compass are free
for those who are willing
to give up their pride
and let God choose their way.

and the way is a guide
to everlasting heaven
with my compass to Kaaba
and the Quran by my side

:( that was the toughest first line ever.

[Yuki]

that was the toughest line ever
to hear or bare my heart could never
he cried and whisperd " how could i leave her"
I ran to him as i shiver
Oh Hold me please, To you i belong forever

that was a horrible poem, oo well...Wooptiedoo:inlove:

Ciao

[Kal-El]

Oh Hold me please, to you I belong forever
And only with you, will I truly will find Home, will I truly find Peace
So with a little prayer in the rain,
I will become your Hope, so Hold me, please,
We will endeavour,
We will have our forever

[H_2]

We will have our forever.
Where the days are long and green.
And the nights are sacred and peaceful.
In sweet dreams we shall sleep forever and ever.

[Kal-El]

In sweet dreams we shall sleep forever and forever.

Faces in the clouds, words in our eyes and whispers from this wind,
Silk laced crowds, beneath that gold glittered rain; what dream is this?

Gushed black stallions dancing gallantly on yellow fields, gallop submissively to me; where are you

Night turning to day, lustful pink roses storm past me - rocking me. So breathless..

[H_2]

Night turning to day, lustful pink roses storm past me - rocking me. So breathless.
I can hardly breathe.
My heart is fluttering.
My legs are quivering.

Where could you be?
Not a moment goes by when my thoughs are not of you.
Where are you? So long i have been apart from you.
Now i tremble to be with you.

Come to me and take away the pain.

[Umm Amjad]

..Take away the pain
Ya Allah which has ingrained
In my hearts veins

You are the one who knows no change
The balance that can never swerve

Each love is now alone with his beloved
and i am alone with you

[Kal-El]

Each love is now alone with his beloved
And I alone with you
Through the darkness, I paused waiting for you
In the light, we started to see everything in two

Let the rain come down and shadow us,
Let every rain drop kiss away every tear drop

[Kal-El]

Let every rain drop kiss away every tear drop,
For we have lived so many lives; seen so much
Yet grown as little such

White chalk no longer writes the days of our lives,
Hush, now, no more bones
Bright nights from now on..

[Kal-El]

*bump*

[Kal-El]

If questioning would make us wise
No eyes would ever gaze in eyes;
If all our tale were told in speech
No mouths would wander each to each.

Were spirits free from mortal mesh
And love not bound in hearts of flesh
No aching breasts would yearn to meet
And find their ecstasy complete.

For who is there that lives and knows
The secret powers by which he grows?
Were knowledge all, what were our need
To thrill and faint and sweetly bleed?

Then seek not, sweet, the "If" and "Why"
I love you now until I die.
For I must love because I live
And life in me is what you give.

[Kal-El]

Bump

[Phoenix CG]

this is so cheesy
Stop being sleazy :rotfl:

[Supernova Nebula]

And life in me is what you give
So that this boredom will leave
So bored I can eat a monkey:D
But the zookeeper lost the key

Sorry Kal-El I ruined your romantic poetry
Where I'm not allowed entry
I wonder where has that dude gone
I hope he'll marry so his mommy's sadness gone (lol):blobblue:

There's famine in Africa, people are killed in Palestine:(
While I'm here, sitting, not doing anything until the clock turns nine:o
In Africa people are dying not eating,
In other countries people die coz too much eating:o

Before I get more silly
lemme make a move slowly
But not yet sleepy
Lemme stay on ummah till someone is not happy:D

:wavey:

[ur_yusra]

Look at me I'm so posh,
I own so sooo much dosh,

..and if you want to look my way,
For each time u will have to pay,

I will only sit in a mercedes benz,
All the millionares are my freinds,

My handkerchief is worth more then your coat,
Oh and I own a private jet and a paddling boat,

Money grows in my back garden,
hatchooo - I beg your pardon,

I better get back to my lemonade,
So just scurry along and fade,

Goodbye.